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Essay revision: The films And the Spring Comes and Mona Lisa Smile differ in cultural origin, plot, and language. The Chinese movie, And the Spring Comes, follows a homely but talented voice teacher in rural China on her path toward her dream—singing in the Beijing opera. Mona Lisa Smile, an America...

Hello Xinyi and Xin,

Thanks for responding to my essay. I appreciate your kind words about my argument. Additionally, your critique of my And the Spring Comes paragraph is very helpful. Focusing on more characters would help to strengthen my argument. Thank you for your comments!

Hello Tingxuan and Miao,

Thank you so much for your comments. I appreciate your compliments about my diction; they were very kind! And thank you for the suggestion about adding my own comments in paragraph 2 and 3--I will do better to assert my thoughts in later revisions.

Hello Zheng (I noticed that your name was written as both Zheng Xin and Xin Zheng; I hope that I got the first name right!) Here are my thoughts on your writing. I think that you wrote a strong thesis statement: "The two movies, Mona Lisa Smile and And the Spring Comes, depict the relationship ...

Hello Lu Miao, Great work! Your analysis was very detailed. I appreciated your analysis of scenery and music in "And the Spring Comes." I did not consider that "Treasure the Spring" was important for context in the movie, and I had believed that it was simply a song with no signi...

Gabrielle Stewart The films And the Spring Comes and Mona Lisa Smile differ in cultural origin, plot, and language. The Chinese movie, And the Spring Comes, follows a homely but talented voice teacher in rural China on her path toward her dream—singing in the Beijing opera. Mona Lisa Smile, an Ameri...